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Question: Is this poem a good gift!?
there's this guy and i see him at least once a week and he's going away for christmas with his family ((i'm 13)) and we're not 'going out' but it's so close!.
I wanted to get him a gift but i'm as broke as a bench at fat camp!.!.!.
so instead i wrote him a poem, do you think it's good and is it a good idea!? here it is:
i sometimes write poems
might seem kinda weird
but it's an okay gift i thought
as Christmas time neared
some of them are dark
for no particular reason
but this one shall be cheery
for the holiday season
you can warm me up
with your 'magic touch'
and you don't seem to care
that i talk way too much
basketball games
i just love to go
and chatting on IM
while the ground fills with snow
movie nights every two weeks
popcorn, soda, and friends
so much fun just hanging out
i always hate when it ends
so Merry Christmas to you
even if you're far away
Merry Christmas to you
well that's all i really wanted to sayWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very good -you have a talent there,and he will love itWww@QuestionHome@Com
amazing poem, best poem, cute poem
he may think that you like him and he will love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes it's a great gift!
Rewrite ideas:
fills with snow: change 'fills' to two syllables (eg fills up, goes white etc)
'this one shall be': use something more natural sounding (eg I made this one cheery or this one is cheery)Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it! it's a good idea if he didn't give you any present but perhaps he would feel not really cared for if he did get you a present!.!.!.!.!.good job with the poem though!Www@QuestionHome@Com
That poem is so cute!. (in a good way)
I think he will love it and I might just copy and paste it onto Word!
Good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com
I think this poem is a great idea, something he can keep forever!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is a truly beautiful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is cute, as long as he likes poetry I think that is great! I think it is really good!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh so sweet!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Aww blessWww@QuestionHome@Com
Thats really cuteWww@QuestionHome@Com
yh its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
very sha!.
(that means "cute" for all you yankies!)Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats a very pretty gift im sure he'll love itWww@QuestionHome@Com