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Question: Is this poem a good gift!?
there's this guy and i see him at least once a week and he's going away for christmas with his family ((i'm 13)) and we're not 'going out' but it's so close!.

I wanted to get him a gift but i'm as broke as a bench at fat camp!.!.!.
so instead i wrote him a poem, do you think it's good and is it a good idea!? here it is:

i sometimes write poems
might seem kinda weird
but it's an okay gift i thought
as Christmas time neared

some of them are dark
for no particular reason
but this one shall be cheery
for the holiday season

you can warm me up
with your 'magic touch'
and you don't seem to care
that i talk way too much

basketball games
i just love to go
and chatting on IM
while the ground fills with snow

movie nights every two weeks
popcorn, soda, and friends
so much fun just hanging out
i always hate when it ends

so Merry Christmas to you
even if you're far away
Merry Christmas to you
well that's all i really wanted to sayWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very good -you have a talent there,and he will love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

amazing poem, best poem, cute poem
he may think that you like him and he will love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes it's a great gift!

Rewrite ideas:
fills with snow: change 'fills' to two syllables (eg fills up, goes white etc)
'this one shall be': use something more natural sounding (eg I made this one cheery or this one is cheery)Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it! it's a good idea if he didn't give you any present but perhaps he would feel not really cared for if he did get you a present!.!.!.!.!.good job with the poem though!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That poem is so cute!. (in a good way)

I think he will love it and I might just copy and paste it onto Word!


Good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think this poem is a great idea, something he can keep forever!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a truly beautiful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is cute, as long as he likes poetry I think that is great! I think it is really good!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oh so sweet!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Aww blessWww@QuestionHome@Com

Thats really cuteWww@QuestionHome@Com

yh its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

very sha!.

(that means "cute" for all you yankies!)Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats a very pretty gift im sure he'll love itWww@QuestionHome@Com