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Question: Can I get an opinion on this not so poem!.!.!.thanks!?
I loved her!. Whether she knew it or not, I'll never know!.
I was leaving and I knew I would not see her again!.
I wanted her to know how I had felt about her all the
years we knew each other!. Friends in her eyes, love in mine!.
As I was not gifted in speaking my heart aloud, and even
worse penning words on paper, I decided to leave her with
a message, the only way I knew how!. A message on paper; a message on paper with lines, kind of a secret message!.
The message ran thus:
Common time!. Largo!? No!. Adagio I think will work better!. Dolce!? No!. Dolorosa!. Yes!. A Major!? Maybe!. D Major!. No!. I will say with A and natural the G as necessary!. Yes!. That will work well when I change to B, and back to G sharp to F sharp, and to E, staying with quarter notes, ending as the beginning in A!.
Now start again, this time eighth note runs on every measure!. Four notes at one octave higher ascending first, and the descending when coming to the end, and back to quarter notes, alternating G natural and G sharp!.
Yes!. That sounds nice!.
Now for the climax!. Begin quarter note A!. Now eighth notes starting with e, f sharp, g sharp, and then a, and now back to quarter notes ascending beginning in D as bass, chords f sharp and d in between, then to bass E (whole note bass ringing out nicely) with chords g sharp and d, then ascend to bass F sharp with c and high octave A in chord, followed by single note e back to bass chord D and f sharp descending in eighth notes e, d, c, b back to c, down to d and up to b, then to g sharp, up to c, and end in the Aac, quarter note rest!.

I was proud of my message and was confident she would love it, not thinking she would not be able to read music!.
Before I left I gave it to her sealed, rolled, and tied in a yellow ribbon and said goodbye in a friendly manner!. My true feelings were to embrace her with a love that could've lasted forever!.
To this day, I always hoped she could see, or one day hear my love, instead of just being puzzled by a bunch of dots!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
So sad!.
I wanted her to know and to have some happy ending of some sort!.
I guess that's not life though, is it!?
Although it's not quite a poem I enjoyed it very much!.
Thank you for your artistic mind!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's interesting writing, but it's not poetry!. Fascinating message!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not poetry- but sweet all the same!. Maybe, subconsciously, you didn't want her to know how you really felt in case of rejection!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautifully written! you have a great gift!. very heartfeltWww@QuestionHome@Com

Condense into a poetic format with lines and stanzas!. Yes, that is what you have, but it is filled with many details that go on and on!.

The poem is fantastic, your love shows through, but it is not easy to read!. tWww@QuestionHome@Com