Thugz this make a good poem?

Question: Thugz this make a good poem!?

plz don't still the poem

May the dagger guide me to density,

may the dagger end my unseen misery,

today dagger cut my neck,

let the blood flow down the,
dark silver bathroom deck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

No!.

Why use "dagger"!? It's so archaic!. You probably don't have a dagger anywhere near where you stay!. Please, use "knife" or "breadknife" or "steak knife" or just "blade" or something!. For something with a roughly similar sound you could use "scissor", as in

May scissor guide me to density, etc!.

The poem may be slightly better with its grammar cleaned up:

May the dagger guide me to density,
may the dagger end my unseen misery!.
Today, dagger, cut my neck:
let my blood flow down the
dark silver bathroom deck!.

Consider removing L1 and L2's the's!.

Cheers!. Don't go and die, you've got work to do before this is anywhere near good!. And you've got to make more good poems, of course, after that!. Don't short change yourself!. Trust me, you don't know how relieved you will be when you're past it and you haven't yet jumped out the window or slashed your wrists too bad or whatnot!.

For the weapon of choice, another option is "razor"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If your having suicidal thoughts(!?) maybe you should talk to someone!.
Or keep writing poems, get remorse out !
If you need to confide in someone I could give a listen!.
Holding onto grief will only cause you more pain and eventually it will eat you up until you have nothing to live for!. Let go !
Realize every breathe you take is a gift!.
DON"T take life for granted, you don't understand how good you have until its taken!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a terrible poem and did you spell thoughs words wrong an purpose it's good if you are very very very very very very very gothWww@QuestionHome@Com