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Position:Home>Poetry> Do you like my short poem?Question: Do you like my short poem!? i walked in a restaurant
brown surfaces, creamy walls, dim lights i had white shoes on, black pants, and shirt was white i looked bright in such a dim mellow place then the demons came, me and my gangster friends shot them down yo!. then we crunked like twas 1980's!. we sit tight for marijuana sticks friend!. we sit tight for marijuana sticks friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: hahaha!. that was funny :) I liked it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com erm not really!. so sorry!. firstly it does really make sense!. its more like a broken up story!? a poem needs rhythm and pace!. and even if you are trying for haku the format shudnt be like this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com NAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA mate! A world of madness exist, and I'm not talking about the marijuana!. My point, and yours!?Www@QuestionHome@Com It didn't have a good vibe to it, it felt like it was a little to amateurWww@QuestionHome@Com no why embarrass yourself!.!.!.thats horrible!.!.!.not a poem!.!.!.a bunch of rambling words!.!.!. go to bed!.!.stay in school!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |