This is a poem im working on tell me what you think?

Question: This is a poem im working on tell me what you think!?

never mind the mid-state of my mind the cheap champagnes got insanity
its hard to find some thing human here this time i thought i saved these adictions
!. what makes sense does cause chaos
lips keep moveing more, in the rithum of abstracts to fallow a way to leave!.
by our self dilution we offer only fantisy
one to help keep the prison alive romance hasn't a name but to the one with out what makes us aliveWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Personally, I'd get more out of the poem with shorter lines that linked to your main idea!. You do need to use a spellchecker and capitalize proper nouns!. If you fix these things, then you'll have a poem that has form, rhyme, meter, and is spelled right!. That will take you very far in the professional poetry world!.

I'd love to see it when you've reworked it some!. tWww@QuestionHome@Com

good, but for some guidelines, read good literature and put your ideas in a hierarchy and then review it, the concept should not miss, you are near to attract some ones attention, keep workingWww@QuestionHome@Com

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