How can I improve this different sort of home for the holiday poem?

Question: How can I improve this different sort of home for the holiday poem!?

Shrinking
not as violet nor
with fear, but
worry like cancer
eating away

ragged face
aged a year for
each month
it's been only three
since I last saw him

dropping a size
for each 30 days
and now!.!.!.
now he may visit
for holiday

will see with
his own eyes
what's happened to me
and know he's prime
cause of it all

he's chosen
drink over life
claims he's fine
but I've discovered
alcohol is bad for the heart

!.!.!.!.a mother's!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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II feel everything in this poem I see it feel it How is one so blind as not to see what he is What he has become,,,The drink has become nasty as ever It still leaves bodies in it's path,,,or wake Www@QuestionHome@Com

So sad, ma!. I'm truly sorry!.

There has been alcoholism within every generation of our family!. A death at 50, one at 45, nearly one at 17 (near fatal accident while intoxicated)!. Strange thing is we all drink socially, just a few have developed the disease (so far) !.!.!. and yes, it is heartbreaking!. One was 75 years old, but otherwise healthy !.!.!. that person didn't even start drinking heavily until retiring from work at age 71 (boredom!?)

I hope that this loved one will get help now !.!.!. I don't think they realize that they are not only harming themselves !.!.!. until some sort of treatment is sought!. Often, people who turn to alcohol are extremely depressed !.!.!. but alcohol, being a depressant, only makes that worse!. It's like a vicious cycle for those with the disease!.

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I wish alcohol was illegal - maybe it would help!. Both my parents drank (heavily) - my dad died from it - my mom wised up early and saved her liver!. Now my son - uses it for every solice that may arise!. I truly understand the helpless feelings that plague each day!. God bless you both and I'm glad that you will be able to share the holiday ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, I can say it is depressing as heck!. You have, fear,,cancer!.!.ragged face!.!.blame!. Not my "cup of tea"!. This is the time of year I try to be extra forgiving and count my blessings, life is to short to dwell on the hurt and pain others may have caused us!. Feel better soon Ma!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oh wow!. Ma!. Only through seeing the pain his choices bring!. Through seeing the consequences, no!.!.!.FEELING the consequences, will he find the right road!. Don't hide your grief and pain!. Let him see, but greet him with the love I know you feel!. Hugs!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Maybe you'll be able to re-write the ending in a few weeks to show a bit more hopefulness!. Not that I expect that, but!.!.!.anything is possible!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Strong ending, not a great ending though for the problem!. Until he is ready, how much can you do!? Thoughts to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No one can help until he wants help, and yes, alcohol is bad for a parental heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

damn, now you have done it!.!. I got to go!.!.
alcohol is bad!.!.
You wrote good,
do not change a thing,
Our sons !.!.!.!.!.!.
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Al-anon has a solution to help your heart, and his path!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

a mothers worries have no beginning nor end!.!.!.but it helps to know other here care, doesn't it!? ((((((MA)))))))Www@QuestionHome@Com

Only he can improve your words!.

My prayers for a happier ending next poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.that's pretty good!.!.but i have no idea how to improve ur poem!.!.sorry!Www@QuestionHome@Com