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Rebirth

As I take a step forward
Bright light fills my eyes
Unsteady are my legs
Weak are my thighs

Blurry is my vision
Silence fills my ear
Not a thing can I see
Not a thing can I hear

Confused are my thoughts
Befuddled my mind
Dizziness surrounds me
My thoughts are enshrined

I sit on the earth
In ashes I lie
Realization comes to me
A Phoenix am I

Throughout the ages
I have always been
A watcher of mankind
In his glories and his sin

From his birth I have witnessed
His follies and his rise
His turbulent violence
His slow self demise

The cities that grew
From the dust on the land
To be brought back down
By his own destructive hand

Though hope lingers on
Through a few in his line
I ponder their thoughts
Are they truly divine!?

Civilizations spew forth
And are burned down in flame
Yet their seedlings continue
Are they and I the same!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I like it!.!.!.have not seen others from you, but will keep an eye out!. The left one actually!.!.!.

P!.S!. I am now convinced that AC Tesla is an official oxygen thief and exists purely for the self gratification of a lonely pathetic soul!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It seems you may have two poems here - the story of the Phoenix and the story of man!. I'm also not sure if it should end in a question!. The narrative is too positive to end on an inquiring note!. I liked the meter and the subject matter was portrayed very well - fine work ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem is quite dull!. The rhyme is not very creative and a bit monotonous, the rhythm is horrid!. The subject is ordinary, the imagery nil!. A linguist is a specialist in language, something you indeed are not!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it a lot!. However, the rhymes are a little too simple in my opinion; it makes your poem seem a little like a children's rhyme!. Otherwise, it's very good and i like the ending!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this poem
it talks about
human senses!.
The second paragraph makes a lot of sense
The first paragraph second line
These two are the ones that stand out
It also talks about human feelings and
what they go through

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That was totally awesome - there is nothing else I can say!. No criticism, no smart-alec answer - you rock, dude! Seriously!. Are you published, by any chance!? You should be, no doubt!. Good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it - and why shouldn't it end with a question - it makes you continue to consider!Www@QuestionHome@Com

AWESOME!!!!!! Way to go! = -)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I couldn't critisize it if I tried!.!.!.!.you are very good with your poems!.!.!.thank you again!Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice rhyme schemeWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.!.that's beautifully written!!Www@QuestionHome@Com