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Question: Embrace it-New Poem (I'd like ur input on it!!!)!?
Embrace It

If you have nothing nice to say, then don't say it at all
That's easy for you to say, cause you did not fall
I was brought to my knees, and when I tried to stand up
I was kicked back down, cause it wasn't enough
Here's how it started I was living life fine
And then two versions of me soon got intertwined
I was happy one minute and the next I was mad
I guess you could say that I blame it on my dad
But he said it was the drugs, and it was nothing else
But what you don't understand is just how I felt
I was living so great, with everything I could need
But then I was struck down and I started to bleed
The truth was a lie at least that's what I found out
But I was told to shut up every time I would shout
I was lost and confused and filled with frustration
Things were just fine before this complication
I hung out with friends and I had a crush on this girl
But God then said, “You're gonna enter a different world!.”
A world where you see and you're no longer blind
The Eden you once had is now hard to find
But I still went searching, and I tried to remake
The life I once lived, for my own personal sake
But the truth of it is that I had to get by
With admitting the fact that my life was a lie
I was always informed that life was worth living
But what sick kinda message were my parents giving
They never got around, to explaining the darkness
And how to embrace it, and try to just harness
All of it's evil that spread through the world
They never defined what love meant to a girl
But now I am in it and I'm just not prepared
They didn't get me ready, that's why I am scared
They showed me a life filled with family and love
They taught me to pray to my God up above
Don't think I'm not thankful for that every day
But there's more to this life than what they had to say
So here I remain, and I'm not backing down
I have a story to tell, so let's all gather round
You might learn something!.!.!.
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