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Question: What do yu think of this poem!.!.!.!?
It's like!.!.!. one of the very few poems I've written that I actually like, and ussually that's a bad sign!. DO you think it's better without the two "childhoods" like, sort of more mysterious!?
Childhood
Kingdom of happiness
The place where no worries trouble us
The place where no one ever hurts
And no one ever dies
The trouble is
No one can stay in this happy place
We grow
And learn the truth about the world
That everyone hurts
And everyone dies
And once we leave there’s no going back
To that kingdom of happiness
Childhood
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Freedom
Kingdom of heaven
The place where no tears dim our eyes
The place where no one ever hurts
And no one ever dies
The blessing is
This place is for all eternity
We stay
And learn the goodness of our God
That he always loves
That he always lives
And once we arive there's no going back
To that world of pain and hurt
Freedom
I like your poem a whole lot!.!.!. keep the "Childhood"s thereWww@QuestionHome@Com
the last stanza you could write
to the kingdom of happiness
we call childhood
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