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Question: Is this a good poem!? i just came up with it plus need a title!?
my feelings are uncontrollable
for you
time and time
day by day
kiss and kiss
it grows
you and me is something i can live with
no us!
i don't think that is even a sentence
i love you
you love me
we love each other
time and time
day by day
kiss and kiss
that's what i can live with
forever!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Nice and original!.!.!.although I wouldn't include, "I don't think that is even a sentence!." Other than that great job, it gives an insight on the most powerful human emotion!.

How about the names--

Forever
Kiss by Day
Always and Forever
Just Can't Live Without You

Hope I helped :)



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Never let me go!? (it kind of fits)

It's okay, but the spacing seems weird!.
The pauses are a little confusing to me !.The "i don't think that is even a sentence" line is what really speaks to me as odd, but otherwise the material is good!. The presentation is what could use some help Www@QuestionHome@Com

i'm sorry that's not a very good poem

this is what a good poem looks like:

In a Station of the Metro

The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very interesting!.

for a title!. !. !.

you and me
My love for you
kiss and kiss
love forever
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Awesome!.!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. I think it should be titled "simply you"Www@QuestionHome@Com