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Question: What do you think of my love poem to a girl I love lol (:!?
Well, here ya go!.!.!.!. (: [Questions at the end]
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~ Yesterday night seems like it just happened
~ Maybe I'm just repeating those same problems again
~ Our times together don't even seem like a relationship
~ I don't want to admit it, but it's like we aren't even friends!.

~ There are things I remember that we shared from the past
~ We thought our love would never last
~ Now I feel like there isn't even a chance for a last dance
~ I just want to be your first and last man

~ I wonder that this love won't last long
~ I hope it can with a little faith and trust from the both of us
~ I just hope I'm not right or wrong
~ So we can say our time together can go on

~ As I'm writing this, I'm listening to Fort Minor's "Where'd You Go!?"
~ I realized that I'm usually the one waiting, you know!?
~ I do find myself, alone
~ And whenever I'm with you, I don't have much to say, and that's now how we roll

~ Sometimes, I just can't wait
~ Hearing and thinking about your name
~ Makes me ashamed enough to feel the pain
~ But it's okay, you aren't to blame

~ We talk about our future too much
~ You tell me to not care too much and just have fun
~ I guess it seems a little tough!.!.!.
~ I just hope I don't end up being the only one in love

~ Picturing me and you in different places
~ Sometimes makes me feel so isolated
~ Wondering how you can be different in two places
~ Maybe we weren't meant to even date

~ It's like we don't even notice each other
~ I know at times I can be over dramatic
~ I want to wake up everyday saying no other person can be better
~ And I wanna ask if our theme song is Mariah Carey's "We Belong Together"

~ "Everything I do, I do it for you" Yeah I know, it's a Bryan Adams song
~ But I think you don't do enough for me, this may seem selfish of me, but its not even a little cheering up!.!.!.
~ Can you believe there's more then just 21 Questions I want to ask about us!?
~ And I'm sure you know my style, it's all about love!.!.!.

~ I've written this poem for you
~ Listening to love and break up songs, No matter what Bon Jovi, those 90s ballads or those sappy Asian love songs say, it wont matter as long as it's just me and you
~ There are also many things I want to say, but I think this poem is done, I hope we can have a better time today, because you know it's all true
~ I Love You Miyu :)
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1) Did you like it!?
2) What was your favorite line/stanza!? DX
3) Which one is better!? This poem or this!?
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.
4) How would you rate it from a letter grade!?
5) How would you rate it from a number grade out of 10!?
6) I know some things were pretty off topic sometimes, and that I tried to rhyme it a lot, so what could I have done better!?
7) Lol, does this poem seem like I was just talking to myself!? XD


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
1) Did you like it!?

Ya i really did!.!.!.great poem

2) What was your favorite line/stanza!? DX

~ Sometimes, I just can't wait
~ Hearing and thinking about your name
~ Makes me ashamed enough to feel the pain
~ But it's okay, you aren't to blame

3) Which one is better!? This poem or this!?
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

this

4) How would you rate it from a letter grade!?

A
5) How would you rate it from a number grade out of 10!?

9
6) I know some things were pretty off topic sometimes, and that I tried to rhyme it a lot, so what could I have done better!?

i myself dont force rhymes!.!.!.i liked yours cause it talked about different music which made going off topic ok!.

7) Lol, does this poem seem like I was just talking to myself!? XD

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im not answering all those questions!. its good!. kind of cheesy the girl might like it!.
it depends on what kind of girl she is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dude this thing is the one of the illest love poems i read ever

bro i feel this way too

9/10

A+
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dont send it to her!.!. your just humiliating yourself!. you are 15!. you are not a man yet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

im 14 and i love it A+Www@QuestionHome@Com

1) LOVED IT
2) ~ Listening to love and break up songs, No matter what Bon Jovi, those 90s ballads or those sappy Asian love songs say, it wont matter as long as it's just me and you
3) This one!.
4) B+
5) 9
6) Write WHAT you like about her!. "Apearence, Personality"
7) xD no, you were talking loud and clear to Miyu!. Beautiful~
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i think its really long and true and sweet!. ok here i go
1) yes
2)As I'm writing this, I'm listening to Fort Minor's "Where'd You Go!?"
~ I realized that I'm usually the one waiting, you know!?
3) omg idk! they're both deep and seet
4)can't
5)can't really!. its just really good ok!. it's true and its not crap written on black and white!. it makes sense and is sweet
6)you don't need to add jokes to it!. your true feelings are good enough
7)i gues but its because they're what you really feelWww@QuestionHome@Com

I hope I'm not being to harsh here but Do not, Do not send this to her, if she is even slightly intelligent, she will find this poem pathetic, it will not help your case at all!. I can tell that you were highly emotional while writing this, however it just doesn't make the cut!. Poems are romantic, but only if you do it right!. I've been writing for over 3 years, and have less than 20 that are publishable!. Of these only one has been for a girl!. Just sit down with her and have a conversation that says the same thing as your poem!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's really good! I just wrote a poem the other day, it turned out actually pretty good!. It wasn't a love poem [It was a Thanksgiving one for school lol] But your better at poetry than me; my poem was like 3 stanzas, I can't write long poems!. =O

1!. Yeah!. I answered that above ^^
2!. My favorite is when it rhymes with her name at the end!. "You" and "Miyu"
3!. They're both good!. Don't make me choose! o!.O
4!. A-
5!. 9!.2
6!. Not all poems 'rhyme' so you don't have to rhyme, really!.
7!. A little bit at some parts!. XD But that's what makes it interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com