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Question: Could you rate this !?
Im not finished yet and iv kinda got some fragments!.
You touched my heart
you took my breath
you were the thing that made me tick
You kept me stand’n, here on the ground
You were the thing that kept me around
So here we go, there and then
In that world that seemed pretend
I can’t explain
The way you made me feel
the feeling was so unreal
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But…
You broke my heart
you made me bleed
you were the thing I didn’t need
You were the chains, witch kept me bound
you were the thing that weighed me down
anyway its more of a song or parts of a song rather then a poem also what do you think is a good name for itWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You once made me whole
and now I am in piecesWww@QuestionHome@Com
that is very good
true talent
just edit it more to make it grammatically correct
and your set
im not good with naming poems:(
im sorry
answer my question please
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Good!
By the way, witch is spelt "which"
You might want to work on your rhythm so it flows better!.
I don't know a good name, but I rate it a 7/10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good, I would like to read the rest when your done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
idk what you can name it but trust me its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com