Thoughts on my new poem?

Question: Thoughts on my new poem!?

POEM NAME: No Beat

Not any feelings
In past pleasures

Just has became meachanic
Some sort of gear

The music stoped long ago
But the dancing still goes

Missing that note
And That measure

All thats there is noise
F**king Noise is allWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It resonates and has a sense of vacuous emptiness, driftwood on clam seas following a storm !.!.!.

Unfeeling numbness
Of pleasure past

Mechanical manoeuvres
Of geared engineering

Music ceased a time ago
The body remains in motion

Remiss of something
Of a significant essential

Remains but a buzz and droning
Of silent thunder!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The music stoped long ago
But the dancing still goes

Wow!.!.!.

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Old days, new days
Isn't time for new days
Lost flings fades away
But look, here comes a new day
full of bright and hopeful aray
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The music stopped long ago
But the dancing still goes on

=O caught my attention!. loved tat part hehe XD i like it :] keep it up!. yay! BanzaiWww@QuestionHome@Com

4 from a 1-10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well thought of!. xWww@QuestionHome@Com

love it!
but i think u spelled mechanic wrong Www@QuestionHome@Com