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Question: Do you think my poem sounds stupid!?
I have to turn it in for a grade, and I wanted to know if it sounds stupid or corny or something!. And I need some help with a title, too!
So!.!.!.here it is:

With the complexion of joy
My face of distress is deceiving
At times I lose all hope
That my dreams are still worth believing

I wait every day for a change
But my hopes are always crushed
Like an elderly man in his grave
My spirit turns to dust

Yet, silent as a graveyard,
I lock those thoughts inside
Few people truly know me
Or how many tears I've cried

Though I appear unconcerned
There is much I have to say
But since no one understands
I hide it all away

I long to see the liars punished
And the honest given praise
Though often their works are disregarded
While the unrighteous get their way

I am fearful of punishment
And disapproval from ones I love!.
I strive to reach perfection
But am never perfect enough

I see happiness as a delicate rose;
When alive, it appears so lovely
But the petals blacken far too soon
And a dark cloud forms above me

All my peers are so confident
But I can barely look in the mirror
Expressing my emotions is torturous
Because my thoughts are never clear

All these feelings wear me down
As each endless day drags on
But I can never reveal them to anyone else
For fear of being looked down upon
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
title:feelings!?


this poem is great!.!.!.

or the title can be -philosophy of feelingsWww@QuestionHome@Com

well i'm afraid i'm not sure of a title


but the poem certainly does not sound stupid, in fact, you may think i am being over the top but it is one of the best poems i have read, i really enjoyed it, i love the vocabulary used and the similes

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Title: Title Goes Here

I like it!
Better than me!

As long as you like it, no body's opinion matters more than yoursWww@QuestionHome@Com

its good for title its hard to think of oneWww@QuestionHome@Com