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Question: Do you like my poem!? I wrote in about 2 minutes!?
Scratch and Strangle
We struggle with the bonds that pull us down
We fight them, gnaw them, strangle them!.
We hurt what hurts us, and don’t think about it!.
When we get what we want, it’s all the same!.
We roll in the dirt, scrabble on the wood and the stone
We punch blindly, and sometimes we hurt those we love
We reach unknowingly, and grab whatever we can
We pull ourselves up, inch by terrifying inch!.
We stand on the edge of the cliff to feel the thrill
We let our fingers trail along the smoldering flame
We crush ourselves inside, and we try to feel!.
We burn ourselves, killing and ravaging our emotions
And put our souls on display!.
-Sleepnix
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
the repeating "we" before each verse was very different, and at the end you used "and" for your last line!. it's simply breathtaking and you elaborated so well in your writing!. any human being could relate to it, and when i had read it i felt as if i could be in those exact moments!. the picture your poem paints is stunning, and please keep writing(:Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's great! You are extremely talented, hence the "2 minutes!." :-) Keep writing!.
I could really use your input on mine:
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Wow!. I really enjoyed that!. The raw truth is incredible!. Thank you for sharing that with us!. I might print it and put in on my binder, if you dont mind! It is beautiful, keep up the writing! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your poem is very good!. I would of never been able to write a poem in about two minutes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
2thumzupp:!. )Www@QuestionHome@Com
it pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
WOW!. thats was amazing you are an extremly great poem writerWww@QuestionHome@Com
Thatz a nice poem! I luuuuuv it!Www@QuestionHome@Com