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Question: My only "lovey-dovey" poem!. Read and rate!?
Define a Good Day

When I wake up to see your beautiful face,
I can tell it's already a good day!.
When I hear your laugh,
I can swear my heart speeds!.
When you look at me and you think I don't see,
I feel like I've been lifted up so high, I can't breathe!.

Your breathtaking eyes,
your pouty sighs,
and oh you know,
how I love to look at you!.
How I love to breathe you in!.
How I love just to be near you!.

You're a treasure I can't give up!.
I need you so I can breathe!.
You're a symphony for a lullaby,
You're a beauty no one lets pass 'em by!.
I need you so, please don't ever leave!.

Your breathtaking eyes,
your pouty sighs,
and oh you know,
how I love to be with you!.
How your voice makes me lose my mind,
babe you are my addiction,
without restrictions!.

I would never seek to hurt you,
when all I could do is love you!.
If I got told to pass you by!.
I would rather die!.

I need you like I need a heart to beat!.
I need you like I need oxygen to breathe!.

Two lovers,
one book!.
Holding onto eachother,
just for another look!.
You can't pass 'em by!.

Night so shy,
when I lay down to sleep,
and I catch you glimpse at me,
the rest of the day so endless,
fades away!.
And all we are,
all we become,
is you and me!.

Tell me if you like! C= I wrote this for an English teacher, usually all my poems are dark and morbid--this was a challenge!.

-MPWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really like this poem!. I like it because it's strong, real, natural and unforced!. You put out the emotions and feelings clearly and honestly without trying to make it into something you're not comfortable with!. It's really refreshing to read a 'love poem' like this!. It's really good! Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its beautiful, retain it, and when you feel in more loving mood edit it with given rhythm and flow, to perfect what is fundamentally awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

cool I like it! It doesn't seem forced at all!.!.!.since you don't usually write poems that are lovey!.!.!. :) good work!.

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I like it!.This poem told misses , endless love, be positive!.!.!.!.It has been given energy to people especially lovers!.!.!.It's nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it!. I myself write some poetry!. Very beautiful, and flows together nicely!.
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