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Question: Please rate this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?
i just wanted to know how this sounds can you rate it on a scale out of 10
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AUTUMN
Leaves start to turn golden
You realize that summer has just ended
Autumn is here
When you walk down the sidewalk
You step on leaves and hear a loud noise
The crunch of autumn
You look around at the houses
They are all decorated for Halloween
Pumpkins, scarecrows, ghosts, and ghouls
The wind starts to blow
As you wrap yourself tighter in your coat
And watch the leaves dance and fall to the ground
you pick up a leaf
Which is very hard and very rough
It falls apart from a gentle touch of your finger
You pick up another crisp leaf
And you hold it to your nose
It smells burnt
You look up
And see the beautiful scenery
You know for sure that this is autumnWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
A very nice picture!. I really like it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
6/10
you need to use more imagery!. you have great descriptions, but maybe you could compare and contrast things!. it sounds like you are listing thoughts, not poetry!. i can tell however that you show potential!. so dont you quit!. just keep writing and each poem you write well get better and better!. good luck, keep writing!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ummm I would give it a 5/10 it was an OK poem but you could do better, try changing up the vocabulary to get a more dramatic effect!. It left no impact on my feelings afterward!. Check out some Robert Frost to see some ways to use words that combine with nature!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
No offense, but it kind of sucks for me!. I don't like this style of poem, I like to hear rhymes or a hook (kind of like a song, a theme or line that is repeated in each verse)!. Leafs don't smell burnt!. Looking up, towards the end of autumn you see bare tree branches with few leaves, which is not beautiful at all!. Earlier in the autumn, before Halloween, and cold winds blowing, when the leaves aren't brittle and dry, the trees, when you look up DO look colorful and beautiful!. The last verse, starting with "You look up" doesn't make sense being at the end of the poem!. I like some of your ideas (thinking of different senses, sight,sound, smell, touch, and the idea that these dead falling leaves appear to be alive and dancing, and that these hard/rough leaves are actually fragile or brittle) but you just need to arrange them in a more compelling way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com