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Question: Please help do you like my poem!?
I made this poem for a friend shes getting married let me know if its good its called In Love Forever
I hope you two always wake up loving each other more than you did yesterday!. I hope every moment with one another never ends!. I hope your heart only grows larger, and may every feeling be breathtaking!. May your eyes never stay focus; I hope they are always lost in each others presence!. I hope your hearts never stop calling each other and that every kiss is a dream come true!. I hope you always believe in the love you share and I hope you never stay on the ground when you look into each others eyes!. May every feeling last until the end of time may your love shine on a cloudy day, may it take away the pain and cure every sickness!. I hope you always melt in each others arms and may you always weaken in each other’s sight!. I hope your love never grows old may it flourish and put to shame every star in the sky, and every moon in the galaxy!. I hope that the day you looked into each others eyes was the day you fell in love, forever!.
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It is just beautiful!. It sounds like a prose poem that is going to be a toast at the wedding or wedding reception!. I especially like the line "May you always weaken in each other's sight!." I might possibly add "and feel deliciously dizzy" after the word "weaken" so that they know it's a good kind of "weaken," ha ha!. If you want it to actually look like a poem, and you are going to read it and then give it in printed format to your friend, I would probably edit it slightly as follows:
I hope you two always wake up
loving each other more than you did the day before!.
I hope every moment with one another never ends!.
I hope your heart only grows larger,
and may every feeling be breathtaking!.
May your eyes never stay focused;
I hope they are always lost in each other's presence!.
I hope your hearts never stop calling to each other, a
nd that every kiss is a dream come true!.
I hope you always believe in the love you share,
and I hope you never stay on the ground
when you look into each other's eyes!.
May every feeling last until the end of time!.
May your love shine on a cloudy day;
may it take away the pain and cure every sickness!.
I hope you always melt in each other's arms,
and may you always weaken in each other’s sight!.
I hope your love never grows old;
may it flourish and put to shame every star in the sky,
and every moon in the galaxy!.
I hope that the day you looked into each other's eyes
was the day you fell in love, forever!.
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It's very cute and perfect for a wedding!. However, it is not really a poem, there is a ton of unneeded language!. At first I thought is was a prose poem but it sounds more like you wishes and blessing for them which is perfectly okay!.
If you want it to be more like a poem you could look up other poems that are similar on poets!.org!.!.!.or on the same website I think you can look at prose poems too which are story poems!. Good Luck
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the theme is good!.u need to write it down as a poem,may be fourlines a para,and not like a prosealso hope that is repeated too often
so just try to write the same as two or three paras each of four lines or so and not as a prose!.good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com
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