Do we need to have a pass or something?

Question: Do we need to have a pass or something!?

Traffic in the dirge
flesh lights stop the flow
and a manacle swings
in the sloping lane!.

We make straw hats from golden leaves
that catch the rain!. Our crescendo drowns
before the piper can show us the sound
of feet that pound the sacred ground!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Oooh I really like this one, I am back to read it again!.

Thanks mate, it annoys me a bit when you leave me with nothing to say!.

No shame in being beaten by a wordsmith is there!?

We are not life, just a part of it!.
A sense of reverence is a good thing I feel!.
Who can it fail if we cease to exist!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

"show us the sound" that's like poetic!.

First stanza a little confusing for me, but the second one makes up for it entirely!. "Additional Details" is a complete truism my friend!.

Edit: I meant what you wrote in the addition details, not that there needed to be additional details!. I just reread my answer and wanted to clear that up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

greedy flesh !.!.
eager to lick an' chew on dirt when
greedy spirit!.!. longin to stretch and
pass the thresholds of earth
and fly high in the skies of
anything met the eye,
here and now!.
instead, flesh lights turn red
holding beauty down!.!.
sniffin' stiffs, playin' clown
dancin' on edged cliffs
change gazes, masks, an' faces!.!.
mourn !.!. torn to pieces!.!. but alas!.!.
Have a pass to surpass!?!
for Hell is born, you know!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, we can, my dear poet!. We need only climb to the heights of poetry or step back from the madding crowd!. Our spirit is not imprisoned; it can travel through time and space to bring beauty to our poor planet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is the kind of write that knocks the breath out of me, Mag!.

Because of its force and its Truth!.
Well done, thank you!.

PromiseWww@QuestionHome@Com

Embrace your divinity, Mag!. You recreate the world everyday, and for the better, I might add!. Take a step back and in, you'll see!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah but you can still have fun in hell, especially if you have a sense of humor and a little imagination!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

feet that pound the sacred ground!.!.nice stuff!.!.
* pass the you know whateee Regwah!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes!. Walmart has a sale on rose colored glasses right now!. I bought a lifetime supply myself!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

free pass to go though the salary no longer applies due to the pending bail out of the Big Three!.!.!. manna from Heaven, blessed be!.

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Nice, Mag!. We fail ourselves and each other when we find (or try to create) a safe and warm haven and then have it destroyed by hatred!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, call me stupid; I read this 4 times and I'm lost on the message!.

This is not exactly "Poetry 101"!. It's a bit advanced for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nicely done!. And I certainly agree, life on earth is hell!. And most can't see the forest for the trees!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I need something, dunno bout the pass!.!.!.!.!.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com

'We make straw hats from golden leaves' :

My mind is going to stay wrapped up in this imagery all day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!.!.!.

Congested hiways to heaven (so we)
end up in hell because
our prayers and hope fail us!.

<<< scratches head!.!. but anyway
"dirge is The Office For The Dead"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

There is no gravity! The world just sucks!Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Earth is Hell and we are imprisoned by it so we make up things that protect us as One Humanity and it fails us in the end because we can't see the forest for its trees!."

!.!.!.very!.!.!.!.!.!. very!.!.!.!.!.

!.!.!.!.!.!.TRUE!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Either that, or!.!.!.if you can convince them it's going to be a pass, a draw play might work!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

isn't it, forest through the trees!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hell maybe, but it's still home!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com