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Question: Your opinion on my poem!? easy 10 points!?
so i just wrote a poem, i was bored so here it is!. please tell me if you think its good or rubbush rate it out of 10 if you like !. dont be afraid to tell the truth if you hate it ! x thanks x
When he smiled and looked my way
My heart melted to the ground
Was he my Prince Charming!?
Had Mr!. Right just been found!?
It couldn’t be true
I had to ignore
Those newly felt feelings
Could be no more!.
A few nights together
I just couldn’t resist
I knew it was right
From the moment we kissed!.
Now it’s our little secret
It can’t leave our lips
For god knows what’ll happen
If it accidentally slips!.
If I had just one wish
I know what it’d be
For people to know
How happy he makes me!.
They just can’t understand
They don’t even try
They just see numbers
That’s what forces us to lie!.
I don’t want to hide it
I want us to be free
Why does age matter to others
When it means nothing to me!?
I know who he is
He’s my best friend’s dad
But unless you say it like that
It’s really not that bad!.
When I’m with him
And we’re all alone
We have such a great time
I never wanna go home!.
I could sit here for hours
Just typing his name
I love him so much
And I know he feels the same!.
It’s not about sex
Or them sort of things
We sit and we talk
And I love when he sings
thanks
by the way i dont often write poetry only now and then xWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is so beautiful!. I married a guy 19 years older than me!. It didn't work out but I understand love!. Good luck to you and I hope you don't get your heart broken!. Now when you tell your parents, especially your dad come to Yahoo Answers to get advice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
ok, I am going to be honest!. I think that it is either a six or a seven!. I have heard better but It wasn't half bad!. It made me think but it didn't move me!. It did not stir my emotions!. I think that it was pretty good though!. Keep trying!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's very sweet but kind of cliche!. It could be because I hate rhyming poems unless they're really creative "ground/found lips/slips be/me" just doesn't really do it for me!. It sounds like you've found love though =]Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is a realllly good poem, it speaks to me about forbidden love and makes me want to know more!. 5 starsWww@QuestionHome@Com
If I were to rate the poem itself it would be an 8 or 9!. It was very good, and it was an eye popper and mouth dropper for me lol!. If I were to rate this poem based upon the main story behind it, well it would be a 2!. I'm being honest like you said!. It seems to me though that you have talent!. If you don't want anyone that you know to know what's going on between you two, then I wouldn't parade it around very much if I were you!.
I just hope he sees it the same way you see it all the way through,
and not just at certain times like you said you two, don't do!.
If not, you'll probably be torn inside,
for being so blind,
but just stay strong, stay focused,
you'll just look back and see,
it was all bogus!.
God Bless!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It was a very good effort!.!.!.Poetry is difficult to write!. The main reason is because we have to take a lot of extra language out!.!.it is not like normal speaking language!. Focus on taking lots of extra language out and replacing it with metaphores and imagery!.!.!.
An Example:
He smiled, looked my way
This heart melting inside me
spoke, and said
Prince Charming, Mr!. Right!?
"Or somthing like that"
it is okay to give animals, inadoment obejcts and alot of other things human like characteristics to increase feeling and emotion!.
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