What do you think of this 'I've Tried And Tried, But Real Poetry Eludes

Question: What do you think of this 'I've Tried And Tried, But Real Poetry Eludes My Pen' poem!?

I can't put the words together
No matter how hard I try!.!.!.
Needing help, I do!.!.!.
Else I'm going to CRY!!!!

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

If at first you lose your pen!.!.!.
Write again!Www@QuestionHome@Com

El Gal!

It's me Buzbe the silver tongued devo at your service!. What this situation needs is a little Bob Dylan-esk folkology:

She's writing poetry
But needs a hand to lend,
Here is your problem Miss
You've got a poison pen
It seems your love interest
Will meet a fateful end
Oh and by the way
I didn't like the tone,
You can overstate your conjuncture
If you know just what it is!.!.!.
Do you Mrs!. Jones!?

Your verses are invisible
I guess they're just pretend
Metaphors are like city buses
They'll come around the bend
Your words are like lepers
Hoping to sentence with a friend
Yet somehow their meaning stands alone,
And the structure of your story
If you know just what it is!.!.!.
Do you Mrs!. Jones!?

Your French is lousy
Your German is absurd,
Your Spanish is applausable
Your Chinese crumbling by each word
You try to master the languages
But your voice is barely heard
Send smoke signals
Instead of using the phone,
A false sense of communication
If you don't know what it is!.!.!.
Do you Mrs!. Jones!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I believe the best poetry comes from hightened emotional states!. Try doing something you love or looking at something you appreciate or remembering when times were toughest!.

The more you can deal with life without much problem, the harder it is to write emotional poetry!. It's a give and take!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

One More Try

You've got to give it one more try
Even though your heart is aching
Give it one more try
Even though your world is breaking
Don't just sit and let
Your whole life pass you by
Give it one more try

What are you trying to do as far as the syllables!?
No matter how I try (6)
Or else I'm going to cry (6)/Else I am going to cry (6)
Does that help at all!?
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Please glean any inspiration you can from the following conversation I had with my neighbor yesterday:

"Hey Joe, what's with the leaf blower!?"

"Whaddaya mean!?"

"Why are you blowing the same pile of leaves all around your yard with a crazed look on your face, THAT'S what I mean!."

"Crazed!?!? I gotta get them leaves!!"

"You like the sound of it, don't you Joe!? That's why you rev your boat motor in a barrel of water, fire up your chain saw when your biggest tree is under 10 feet tall, and break out the snow-blower when there's less than an inch on the ground!. You like NOISE, Joe, isn't that right!?!?!?"

"It looks like it's gonna snow!! Gotta get them leaves!!"

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You break my heart, dear… I’ve been there so long it seems natural!. With you, I’m sure it’s only temporary!. It’s time to let it go and go feed those wolfs, enjoy a cool breeze, look for a shooting star, and count the lucky ones!.

If you feel this way tomorrow, then I’d say you are tired, unconsciously worrying about “Keeping up Appearances” or “Staying on the Pedestal” with your writing creativity!. When given a little time, cream always rises to the top!.

7s!.!.!. Will this help!?
Slap that pen and make it sound
Sharpen quickly, make it round
Smiling lips will laugh aloud
Twisting hips will move the crowd
Toss those worries to the breeze
Standing still will make one freezeWww@QuestionHome@Com

I can't put the words together
No matter how hard I try!.!.!.
Needing help, I do!.!.!.
Flat out want to CRY!!!
or
Please! before i CRY!!!

!.!.!.!.!.is this what you mean!? actually im pretty surprised you dont have any words flying around!.!. hahaha! Snidely joke!
!.!.!.well c'mon, they kinda fly!.!.!.

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A wise person once wrote "Those you love the most, to them can you say the least"

We feel the love Elys! lol

PS well acrostically you have a start on "Inne!.r!.!.!.turmoil"!?
go for that! I know you can do it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hello ! good morning ! it is not my pen eluding poetry it is the fact that my mind eludes the joy of real poetry!. The supply of doper-main to my brain has gone AWOL!.
Bless you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Know that you are not alone!. My poetry, muse, whatever it is that creates the words, is gone, and I am alone with myself!.!.!.and now, for a time, alone with you!. They will come again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dondi with his eye of blue
Told you what you need to do!.
Crying won't do the trick
It only makes mascara stick!.
Give the muse a kick in the bum
Then beautiful poems, they will come!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My power for poetry stunted,
My frustrated pencil now blunted,
It's happened to you!?
I think I'll cry too,
My papers now screwed up and munted!.

know how ya feelWww@QuestionHome@Com

You just need to shut down between 12:30 AM until around 5:00 AM PST--approximately--and then everything will be up and runnin' like new!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Just get back to your baking!. Your mind is preoccupied with all those tasty delights
You'll be fine when the baking's out of the way!.
Everything will return to normal!.
Even poor lil Snidely will too!.
He he he!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah yeah very funny!!!,,,Ya gotta get 1-800-Rent-A-Muse,,,I think mighty Mouth has stock in it ,,,,, Sorry that's Rent-A-Mole

edit--------Weather's a little chilly,, How Be'z it down thar!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry Elys, definitely no help here, I'm a reader, not a writer!.
Just relax, & let "the little gray cells" do their thing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

To me poetry is your thoughts put on paper for others to read, understand and feel them!. They may rhyme or not but they are yours!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really wish that I could! But I do believe that My poem writing days are done! You just need to take a coffee break,and I know that You will come back with a awesome poem! That will knock our socks off!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I gotta headache!.

I'm goin' home an' ritin' a short story or somethin'Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nope, you're on your own here!.
Go read your mail!.
Maybe you'll get some inspiration from that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm sure if you asked Snidely for some help he would happily oblige!. Meanwhile, do not despair; Elyslund with writer's block is still better than most of us at our best!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You write more then your share
and none can compare with your muse!.
If not a bit later, your GM will come soon!.
I wonder who this is directed to!.
kudosWww@QuestionHome@Com

Just need to know
just what you need,
To make a verse
That we will heed!.
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Join the club! I'm off for a nap now!.!.!.
Hope springs eternal!.
The Sun will come out tomorrow
Effen cliches!

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Eat a bag of Bugles!.!.!.!.

There's a short story "why", but I'll spare everyone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don't worry too much!. Just sit outside and enjoy nature!. Your brain needs a rest now and thenWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's a real tear-jerker, no doubt!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you're a mind reader!! HA!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Join the rest of us -- well, not the rest, I guess a few, or maybe a couple, or could it be just me!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

No change there, then!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have a style all your own!. I like it!.
Edit: Hey Andy, How`s it going up there!? Good to see you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com