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Question: How is my poem so far!?
i wake up, feeling tired as hell
it is humanly impossible to ignore that alarm bell
i can barely walk and i feel so cold
my memory's shot, why do i feel so old!?
i show up to work 5 minutes late
the elevator closes even tho i yell "wait!"
i run up the stairs gasping for air
everyone in the office is giving me glares
out of breath i honestly don't care
is there a water fountain anywhere near here!?
everyone ignores me, i wonder what it could be
until i see my boss, patiently waiting for me
late again he asks do u even no wat time it is!?
wont happen again sir and this i am positive
got caught up in traffic you know how bad it is
yadda yadda son this isn't politics
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Awesome Rhythm, you really have a thing for a beat, and the AABB, is a simple but really effective format for this!.
I love how it starts out how much the morning blows, and then goes to work!.!.!.
"late again he asks do u even no wat time it is!?
wont happen again sir and this i am positive
got caught up in traffic you know how bad it is
yadda yadda son this isn't politics"
The rhymes in this stanza, are really creative and witty!.!.!.
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I love this!. Do you happen to have any more of these!? You should perhaps try to get them published so that your poems are going to be protected!.
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I really like this poem!. It's creative, witty, and you have a great rhyme scheme going!. My only advice is to fix spelling, capitalization, punctuation, et cetera so it will be easier to read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
COOOOL!
Traffic was like a parking lot
Please direct me to the coffee pot
I love to write too!
This was fun
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i love it!
i can feel the emotion with it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
haha! that's great!
so true and I can so relate to it! I found it funny!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
sounds good so far!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
u no what i liked it a lot Www@QuestionHome@Com