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Question: What do you guys all think about this poem!? do you think it is good!?
"UnReflected World"


I'm here to tell you about the world beyond
the mirror's!.
It's appearence, deseptive and secrets unclear!.
The questions now flood me with confusion and fear,
The mirror is a mystic that comes from far to near!.

The reflection is casts does not show neither
lies nor the truth!.Is there more then one set of
eyes looking back at you!?

Strange eyes from afar may be stairing you down,
saying not a word and never even making a sound!.
Behind that mirror no matter square or round is a
spiritual demention remaining hoplessly bound!.

A whole new demention, their world still unknown!.
But they have insight into our world yet they
remain mysteriously unshown!.Their world is hidden,
so they are locked in all alone!.So they continue
to remain a world of the unknown!.

They watch us and our world through their mirrored gate,
Just waiting and watching us seal our own fate!.The
Mystic is scary there is no debate!.But are they creatures
of love, or creatures of Hate!.

They are not of the human race, but spirits that never
leave a trace!. They watch us through the mirrored gate,
we have no way to know if they are dangerous or safe!.

Remember this when you next glace in the mirror,
the eyes looking back may cause you to fear!.The spirits
are dwelling not far but real near!. From the otherside
they are watching you through the mirror!.




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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow, i think it's a very original poem!
these can be some areas u might want 2 improve:
in the third verse "down" does rhyme with "sound", "round" or "bound" and in the fourth verse u used "unknown" twice i'm not sure if this is the type of feedback u want but i think they r important when writing my poems
i look forward 2 reading more poem by u good luck!

edit: sorry, i think that was a bit confusing, what i mean is u can edit it a bit, but i think it can be very goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like the message behind it!. Are you saying that watch what you see or you might come to be conceited!.!.!.!? Or real mystical creatures!?

I think it needs some editing, but besides that I like it!.

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Wow! I'm shivering! could use a little revising, but keep all the ideas in there its wonderful!!! definitely get it published!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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its good!Www@QuestionHome@Com