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Question: Would someone please, please read this poem, and tell me what you think of it!? Thanks!.!?
Poem entitled: Light!.!.!.The Sun

You stood up!.
You stood tall!.
Then a strong wind came, and you began to fall!.
Everyone watched (including me) as you crashed to the ground!.
No one had ever heard such a devastating sound!.

What's wrong honey!?
What took away your happy smile!?
It made the sun shine extra bright!.
You gave us light!.

You were a lamp to guide this town!.
Now all we do is drown!.!.!. in the tear you cry!.
We watched you fly!.!.!.
Now you're hanging on a thread that's about to break!.

What's wrong honey!?
What took away your happy smile!?
It made the sun shine extra bright!.
You gave us light!.

He made us smile!.
He gave us what's inside this cup of love!.
He's falling again!.
Someone stop the wind!.
It'll be okay!.
Honey just pray!.
Don't get yourself caught in this mess again!.

It'll be okay!.!.!. again I'll say!.
Smile!.
Please smile for us today!.
Please don't cry!.
Is that a tear forming in your eye!?

What's wrong honey!?
What took away your happy smile!?
It made the sun shine extra bright!.
You gave us light!.
Now we're groping in darkness looking for light!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's good

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Honestly- if you were going write trite over used clichés picking only the most insipid-bravo-goal accomplished!. The verse is devoid of imagery, depth, perception and most of all a message!.
It leaves the reader believing you have experienced very little life, no passion and are slightly delusional concerning your own ability!. Let me guess-your not sad when it rains-it rains because your sad!.

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