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Position:Home>Poetry> This is a transaltion from Spanish. Does this draw a clear picture?Question: This is a transaltion from Spanish!. Does this draw a clear picture!? MANIFESTO OF THE SOLDIER WHO WENT BACK TO WAR
by Angel Miguel Queremel (translated by Donald Devenish Walsh) Know this!. Spent bullets die in the mouths of the forgotten dead!. I have seen it!. I have also seen buried guns, sown by the rain, grow and blossom in the black smoke, and larks made their nests between bayonet-branches!. ***** From: War and the Poet!. Eberhart/Rodman!. 1945!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: At first I thought transaltion was a typo!. After reading, I feel it may be quite accurate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Spanish is a very vocalic language, unlike English!. I believe it flows better in Spanish, but this is an excellent translation!. There ain't no such thing as a translation that doesn't lose something, but this one is as good as it gets!. Here is the original poem: Sabedlo Las balas perdidas mueren en la boca de los muertos olvidados!. Lo he visto!. Y he visto también los fusiles enterrados, sembrados por la lluvia crecer y florecer entre el humo *****, y anidar las alondras entre ramajes de bayonetas!. --------------------------------------!.!.!. Sabedlo Yo sé lo que es el frío de esas manos crispadas que buscan una lápida en la cantera de la madrugada y una cruz en el vuelo de la golondrina sin destino!. Manifiesto del soldado que volvió a la guerra!. Santo y se?a!. IThe word Yahoo blanked out is simply the Spanish word for 'black')!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I was searching for the original in Spanish and I'll read it!. However, I've never enjoyed "translated" poetry!. The passion from 'Latin' languages to English is "Lost In Translation"!. (IMHO) I also believe that the "beauty" of the words as visuals are lost!.!.!.!.!. y Amor!.!.!.! Surge desnuda y baila sobre rosas una danza macabra; mi Salomé, que sea tu boca siempre muda y sea tu desnudez la gran palabra! Edit: The English translation (S1) "draws a clear picture" - the original paints it!. Edit: I see this 'site' as Miguel's!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Powerful poem!. If the linguist in the group says it's a good translation, it is!. P!.S!. Whatinhell is a "transaltion"!?!?!? Can't find it anywhere!Www@QuestionHome@Com I can't comment on clear(er) but those words up there are damned clear and very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Very clear!. Yet written words are not heeded!. Look where we are today!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Realistic and gritty prose :DWww@QuestionHome@Com Very deep!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |