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Question: RATE MY POEM PLEASE AND BE VERY HONEST DO YOU KNOW WHAT ITS ABOUT!?
Mind drenched with visions of you ,the anticipation so cruel!.

Longing to hold you, so much that I'd barter a heart beat!.

From office to car, recalling your tone as I dance through traffic!.

Falling through the door you attack my eye with precision!.

So captivated my approach is an illusion, as I notice I'm holding you!.

Your smooth body slides against my palms while pressed into my body!.

Eye lids weighted as I fondle your neck, stroking the strings of your hair!.

An off pitch moan escapes you in effect, to assure me I've been missed!.

Turning you on is an art form in itself, dedication has granted my ability!.

Pulling strings of your hair tighter producing fine tuned melodic moans!.

Becoming one as sensual tones feedback creating melodies of passion!.

Angelic praises churn my vocal chords, till songs of love release themselves!.

Ascending behind eclipsed eyes I'm rebirthed to reality by a faint sniffle!.

Pulling back the curtains of my eyes beholding the love of my being!.

Overtaken by the atmosphere of what she'd walked in on she holds me!.

Tied in embrace, we introduce our lips, our tongues dance the tango!.

Vision to vision I kiss the cool tear tracks that journey across her cheeks!.

Tears saturated with love for she was acquainted with my love for her!.

She knows my love for this guitar grasp no earth to the parade of our hearts!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Love it, first i thought it was about making love to a woman but now i think is about playing a guittar and u love playing it then u made love to a woman u love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i rate it as a pretty good erotic electric guitar,and the passion and love for it!.that is my assumption!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow that was amazing! I take your poem was about someone loving someone else erotically and emotionally!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Awh, very amazing!.
I love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem doesn't rhyme! I think that it needs more work pal!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

the tone of ur poem is fantastic and it has got touch of mature feeling in it!.
i liked it!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

your a poet and you know itWww@QuestionHome@Com

What a load of self indulgent crap

Jeeze man get a life - rock out some tunes instead of this innane sh!tWww@QuestionHome@Com