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My girl is beautiful , she is fun
she is the light in my life just like the morning sun,
I love the way she brings her body close to me
the sweet sound of her breath,
the fragrance of her warm body
i love the way she splashes her shining hair across her face
it feels as if she has lit up the entire place
i love her walk
the way she
makes me mad
with her incessant talk
her eyes like ocean r very blue
she is very beautiful
yeah it's true
but now she's gone
i m very sad
baby please come back to me
i'll never be bad
i cry very loudly hoping she would hear my pain
baby please come back to me like monsoon rain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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great poem !.!.!. good job !.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You should definitely either get rid of all of the rhymes or add more because half of it has an AB format and the other half doesn't rhyme and that sounds very amateurish!. And the monsoon rain part doesn't really make any sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice, although I hope you don't plan on actually showing this to her!.!.!. please!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com