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Question: What about these irregular line lengths!? Do they mar the finish!?
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FOOLISH FOLLY

Along the walkway where I wander
grows a springy wire-haired moss!.
To it sticks the fairy feathers
fallen from their frilly frocks!.

I picked a pint of fabric fibers
sprinkled round with flecks of gold!.
In my pocket with the pebbles
through the hole I left unsewn!.

What a mess now I am making
as my strolling seeds the soil!.
Flung afar from fancy frolics
caught among my cuffs and folds!.

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OMG! I just figured out alliteration and assonance!. Thanks for the example which is also a fun poem, but more thanks for the lesson!. The light bulb takes a bit longer to click on, I find, than it did at 50!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No!. You have two sets of 9,7,8,7,!.!.!.end on 8,7,8,7,!.!.!.a rhyme pattern, and correct!.!.!.meter!.!.!.
(In S2 L1 my tongue wanted to say!.!.!."I picked a pint of pickled peppers!.!.!.but I'm whacked)

Oh heck, i didn't read the other respondants first!. now I'm off to search on assonance!.
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Lots and lots of alliteration!. Purposeful (!?) redundancy in the title!. Great assonance!. Smiling at the imagery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The only trip I had was the 1st line of the last stanza!.

I enjoyed seeing the "protagonist" plant his found seeds!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I dunno about irregular!.!.!.it seems to flow pretty nicelyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds good to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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