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Question: For poet's only! okay!!?
do u like my poetry!?

"Tonight I feel like Dying"

the stones have cracked my head
there's blood cascading down my face
and all I see is red

tonight I feel like dying
life's promises are lies
no hope, no smiles, no music
but my solitary cries

tonight I feel like dying
an end to misery
call me selfish, call me worthless
tell me what you think of me

tonight I feel like dying
I know that you don't care
I wished for loved ones at my side
but there was no one there


"Wander Drank After Four"

four long island iced
teas will **** you
up!. I know well
that this is true!.
then you'll wander, wander
blindly through the streets
with their blinding, glaring
streetlamps and traffic signals
to find a bench
subterranean, on which to
rest your eyes and
head for a moment
(just a moment, officer!)
like the hobos do

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
dood hobos!?
that ruined the second one
the first one is so deep it lets us feel whoevers pain
and suffering
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the dying one is deep!.
but the hobos do part in the second one makes it sound childish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The first one was really good but the second not so much!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

1st one okey- it is goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

I LIKE THE FIRST ONE IT HAS A GREAT FLOW AND very descriptiveWww@QuestionHome@Com