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Question: Any helpful tips on my poem!?
its a poem for my boyfriend's b-day that goes with the gift i made him!.!.!.its a polyester blanket with iron-ons of our pictures together!.

Remember those nights we spent on the phone!?
The nights when you shivered, and went numb from the cold!.
I remember those nights for they are when I miss you the most,
The nights I want to wrap my arms around you and keep you sheltered and warm!.

This gift I have made is to fill my place,
The nights that I am missing and am too far away!.
I made this to keep you warm and wrap all around you,
The nights that you miss me and want to feel me surround you!.

I hope with every time you see this gift it will bring you smiles,
The nights when I am not around to do so myself!.
I hope that the pictures will open your memories,
The nights when I am missing to help make new ones appear!.

The thing I hope for the most too come from my gift,
This night that we have to depart once more in sweet haste!.
That you will remember our happiness, our love, and our bliss,
This night of your Birthday until I see you again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
well, since this is a sweet poem I think I'll help you condense it a little because being concise is key, what do you think of this!.!.!.

Remember the nights we spent on the phone!?
When you shivered, almost numb from the cold!.
Those were the nights I missed you most,
Wishing I could keep you warm in my arms!.

This gift of love is to fill my place,
On nights I'm missing and too far away!.
Made to bring warmth and wrap all around you,
On nights you want to feel me surround you!.

I hope this gift will bring you smiles,
When I'm not around to do so myself
And help you remember our happiness, love, and the bliss
Of this night of your Birthday until I see you again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very nice poem !.!. would you please check mine i would really appreciate ithttp://uk!.answers!.yahoo!.com/question/ind!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com