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Question: Take a look at my poem!? (repost)!?
I posted this just a few minutes ago but I felt like what I had originally typed in the title portion was deterring people!.
Honesty is great and you will not be punished for it!.
Thanks :)

egg shells
slowly!.!.!.
peeling off
wish to let the yolk of me spill
out!.!.!.
through this pencil
gray marks against egg white paper
but, alas
there is no golden life left within
no more land of milk and honey stirring
I have been hard
boiled!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The yolk's on you, your words are golden, for all that you think yourself hard boiled!. Are you really having such a time with writer's block!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

The metaphor of egg as life is excellently done!. You have obvious talent for imagery!. You might revisit the format and change some of the lines for emphasis!. For example:

no golden life left
within
no more land of milk and honey
stirring
I have been hard-
boiled!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i liked it alot :) take a look at mine!?

http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.


if you look at any of them look at the first one please it means the most to me Www@QuestionHome@Com

What title would you give this one!?
good work!.
How bout checkin out mine!?

1> http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

2>
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index!?!.!.!.

Thanks have a nice day
al yoz
~fiazioWww@QuestionHome@Com

O MY GOSH!. THAT IS AMAZING!. I DON'T KNOW WHAT ITS ABOUT!.!.!. BUT ITS MEANINGFUL AND ITS FABULOUS AND AMAZING!. AND YEAH
please read my poem!. link is:
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love the meaning!. I hope that you will erase all that has been changed about you and become the egg you once were!. It is very beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is good,sad and tough!.
I hope you can still find that soft core inside!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

Keep writing,good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com