PLEASE GIVE YOURE OPINION ON THIS POEM!!?

Question: PLEASE GIVE YOURE OPINION ON THIS POEM!!!?

Im only 13 so not so much burning please

Deep Down in her heart there is pain there is sorrow

She does not show it

she hides the pain
she hides the tears
she hides the sorrow

for she knows it does no good to grive

In her eyes you can see right through her

to the pain
the tears
and the sorrow

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oh my goodness that's beautiful :D Www@QuestionHome@Com

its amazing, love the flow, but like everyone else said, don't use sorrow, kind of an odd word to use, also yeah describe the girl !. otherwise nice job
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Just a correction, grive is spelled wrong, it is grieve you mean correct!? Otherwise, very nice poem!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not to bad,
ITS OK BUT ID ADD MORE OF A VARIETY OF WORDS!
LIKE DONT USE SORROW ANYMORE THO!

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I really like it!
I think you should add a few more statements to make it more powerful :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

its ok ,
i think you should use more variety and interesting words that paint more of a picture of this girl !.!.!. Www@QuestionHome@Com