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What do you thinkof my poem!? i know its long but PLZ READ!!!
i wrote this poem for a friend that passed away, at only 15!. she was a good person, dont jusge somebody unable to deffend!. thanx!.
the feeling of pain
deep down in my heart i feel a strain
the twitch in my eyes
the tingling in my thighs
waiting,watching, as he enters me
the first time i didnt see
the true colours he now reavealled
i remember the moment, being caressed
couldnt imagine what was to come
he was high as was i from some rum
i felt the love, he did not
i was just one of the lot
i reminisce backto this day
what was i thinking as i lay
i remember him being with me
my first STD
some call mea ****, a hoe, a ***
drunk, back to the pole id tag
i remember
shaking my hips
my sexy hips
as he lied, betrayed me
no, he aint no cup of tea
the looks from the audience
present is not tolerance
what was i thinking, feeling, believing
this wasnt meant to be, it aint relieving
the stress frommy past
my history will last
i remember
the day i got the call
my boyfriend, if hes that, was shot, my guy, tall
sweet to the eye
did he deserve to die
a prostitute was i
nothing more, nothing less; tie
should he live
i shouldnt give
but then again, a prostitute
thats my middle name; my first, attitude

PLZ DONTANSWERBY SAYING IM NOT READING SOMETHING SO LONG!.!.!.
i wrote it a long time ago, well a year ago, when i was 13!. just wondering what you think!. i feel this can relate to anybody, its how you interpret it!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Life is tough!. The only way to have decent experiences is to make decent choices!. Of course, at 13, ur rents r sposed 2 b making those choices 4 u, and if they r not, life is going 2 b really tough, because then you learn by very, very, very painful mistakes, and if you make too many mistakes, then ur life is just gone!. That is the way it is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It doesn't sound like it's about a friend of yours!. Wouldn't this be about how you had sex with your boyfriend at 13 and then got pregnant!? And people called you a s-l-u-t!? Yeah, that's what it sounds like!. I know your boyfriend didn't get shot!. You said he's still living!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well from the other poems you claimed that you wrote where better than this one!. But I guess you was younger though!.!.!.!.!.I guess it is okay for a poem you just starting!.

Out of courosity, why did you post this poem!?!?!?!?
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its good and in ways it does touch ppl cuz ppl go through this everyday so in a way are writing is touching ppl in ways olny they can explain u are good keep it up u might never know where ur writing might take u in life k well have a good day :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

It sounds like a badly put together Lilly Allen song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice poem!. Captures the "girl-gets-used-by-guy-for-sex" situations!. Yes, I read the whole thing!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

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i think its nasty and very sad that you could write a poem like this and now to be with child its no wander your pregnet!. it sounds like your thighs are attached with springs and i dont want tosound mad at you but you did want the truth so really i think your mom needs to have you looked at by a doctor because the next thing will be self distruction what your doing in life ,its up to you now how you turn out ,slut ,hoe ,or a very good mother, its in your hands now!!!!!!!
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