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Question: Honest opinion!.!. does this sound okay!?
Oct
29th Wed
Snow in October!?
I threw you out the window doing twenty mph over the speed limit!. I saw you crash into pieces on the side of the highway and my heart didn’t came running to call the ambulance!. So now, why are all of these medical bills coming back to haunt me!? You are supposed to be dead!. You’re supposed to be gone!. Yet I can hear the sirens in what I remember of your voice!. I see the flashing lights when I think about looking into your eyes and I feel the broken glass when I dream of holding your hand!.
Then, it was all that I wanted!. I wanted you to break, I wanted you to fall!.
But now I admitt, the only break I wanted was a breakdown!. A full-hearted breakdown that would make me weak and disappear into a deep spell where only you had the cure!.
And the only place I wanted you to fall!.!. was deep enough in love with me to not forget, not run, and not shadder from my life like the way you did on I-97 at 85 miles per hour!.
remember!.!. i dont know you so dont feel bad telling me how you really think :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Interesting analogy!. I love poetry and used to write a lot creatively in school!.
You seem to have quite a bit of passion within and like to express deeply!. But it can be a little confusing!. Is the title 'Snow in October'!? The beginning seems confusing based on the title and it was a little difficult to see how your final thought completed the first thought!.
I'm not being harshly critical :-) !.!.!. just trying to help you perhaps refine it a little!. If it has anything to do with love, the beginning sounds, for lack of a better word, morbid!.
But that's just my view!. You do sound like you have a great and creative imagination and have probably written lots of great poems!.!.!.ever thought to go lyrical!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
omg this is amazing! i love it!!! honestly!! write me a poem! omg its really really good! like my words cant describe how amazing it sounds! so do you want to write me a love poem or something cause this sounds sooooo well writen! how old are you cause this sounds like it came from an english major or somthing! im so adding you to my contacts! omg!.!.!.!. I LOVE IT!! Www@QuestionHome@Com
who ever wrote this was confused but i think some one or some thing smack the **** out of the person to make them see how much in love the person is with xxx!.!. and they need to stop drive they mite get in a crash!.!.!. lolWww@QuestionHome@Com
It's not romantic, and I finally found out what the poem was about in the end, so everything else you wrote above is just to make the poem fatter (Boring)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hm!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
yesWww@QuestionHome@Com