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butterfly and bee

once bee buzzed by the lilting butterfly
tiny wings afire with his speed
aiming for his garden target
rifling along in his usual haste
butterfly was darting up down and sideways
as if suspended on a string
and pulled about by a drunken puppeteer
bee had thought of speaking a warning
to local pedestrians those operating
in a different time frame than he
he had tried to say watch out move over I’m coming
but he got no farther than waa
waa and by that time he had come and gone
and all that someone like butterfly
would hear was waa nnnnnn and so
bee wondered about his early warning system
perhaps he’d buzz louder – one of these times
there’d be some collision – traveling ninety
leaves per moon drop is a very very fast pace
and butterfly always slow to take notice
would hear the waa nnnn’s from time to time
tilt a wing and turn to see who’s zipping by
to see mr tiny-yellow-and-black-dot vanishing
into the faraway but he really didn’t care
something else was on his mind!. there
was something else he’d been thinking about and
he’d merely forgotten what it was
so he turned and floated, turned and hovered
capturing the glance of the sunshine
upon his wings reflecting it
into my eye
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May I steal some-one else's words!? - OMG
This is marvellous!. It is lyrical and beautifully written (one of these days, I'll get you to punctuate!.!.!.!.but hey, I can't have everything)

I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this!. To imagine you are an insect, and to wonder what they are thinking is a huge imaginative step!. And you've chosen to make their existence seem idyllic!.
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Yes it is good, better then I could ever do!Www@QuestionHome@Com