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Question: If you can, Please give me feed back or Opinion on my poem I wrote!?
hi i just wanted people info on my poem nothing too big just want feed back if its a lovely poem then its just me giving back and sharing!. here it is please rate it from 1-10 and tell me how it makes ya feel!. thanks
here it is
we can be friends
we can't be lovers
nstead we are just special to one another
we can't be friends
we can be lovers
we are just special to one another
You want to be friends
I want to be lovers
Yet we will just stay special to one another
we'll bump heads
we'll have our fights
The conflict of this love
How will this end each night
A beautiful thing almost set out to be a tregedy
Harsh endeavour of this fidelity
War of two hearts special to one another
Hard to speak from the heart
Since The heart Can't speak how the heart feels
No word can describe how intimate my love is
Love will solve everything
Your all I see !.!.!.All I need
Your just special to me
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
!?!?!?!? I really hate hurting people's feelings!. It took you how many lines to say the same thing over and over!? I started writing poetry when I was 15, and it read just like this!. After years of figuring out how to use my words and place my sentences, I just got my first book published!. Good luck, you will find it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

u seem to have some great thughts,just try and re edit it!.try to avoid using the same sentences repeatedly!.goodluck,carry on,do not lose heart!.try and keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

9!.5 , poor things good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com