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Question: I wrote a poem for my sister can you please tell me if its good!. please!!?
my sister was kicked out of the house almost a year ago with tomorrow it will be a year so i wrote her a poem because im going to see her tomorrow!. please be honest!.


Im Waiting -by Sydney Hernandez!. (me)

i remember coming home and waiting for you!.
and waiting and waiting and waiting!.
i really didn't believe my eyes!.
i thought it was a joke so i waited a little longer!.
still nothing!.
im still waiting for you to come home but this time i know exactly what happened!.
you got kicked out of the house!.
what bothers me is it wasn't moms decision but mothers husbands decision!.
not dad!.no not him it wasn't his decision it was our mothers new husband!.
i never liked him i knew he was bad to the bone since he married mom!.
you could see i wasn't acting when tears rolled down my eyes!.
and you could see mom wasn't acting when she ignored me!.
mom changed!.for the worst!. and now i got no one but a rat!.
literally a rat!.
i admit i have cried!.
i mean it hurts me!.
breaks me!.
kills me!.
but what hurts more is,that she wont let you come back!.
i miss you so much!
my sister,best friend,counselor,even teacher!.
we had never been this far apart!.
for this long either!.
364 days too long!.
i admit i was kind of relieved to seeing you go at first!.
but one minutes was all i needed to realize that i need you in my life!.
you have always been in it!.
why not now!.
you said you couldnt wait to see me go to my last year of middle school!.
but the first day of school you werent there!.
and im going to keep on waiting as always!.
like my little protest of one!.
i will come home,sit on the couch were we said goodbye and wait for you to get here!.
then i will go to sleep and come back start all over again like i have been doing since the day you left!.
i will wait!. i promise!.
no matter what happens im going to wait for you!.
okayt big sis!? i just wanted to let you knowthat im waiting for you to come home!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You wrote a beautiful poem for your sister, Sydney!. You write from your heart, the best way to write!.

I'm not going to critique your work on any grammar stuff because I think you should give this to her just as is!. If I were her I would treasure this forever!.

I know it's hard to not have her there for you right now, but if you can get through this time in your life, you can hopefully be there for each other the rest of your lives!. You realize the importance of sisters!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's wonderful!.

really it's very good because it's from your heart!.

during this rough time !.!.!. it may be best for you to know everything that has a beginning will have an ending!. this terrible time will pass!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well as a poem eh!.!.!. but it was very touching, she should definitely read it!Www@QuestionHome@Com