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Question: Does this love poem sound good!?
Okay here it goes!. It rhymes so it might sound childish!.!. but I think its very well!.!. lovey! LOL
Its called You!.
I see you and think, what do I do!?
I check my hair, I watch what I wear!.
I wonder when he will ever notice me!.
I hope you will whenever that may be!.
You smile everyday, you laugh is genuine like pure gold!.
When I talk to you I feel bold!
We could share stories, I would have no fears!.
When I'm around you, there are no tears!.
I see you and think, "What do I do!?"
I try to get your attention, even if It means detention!.
I try to get you to notice me!.!.!.
When You do my mind fills with glee!.
You are all I think about, I know this sounds dumb!.
But whenever I see you I got completely numb!.
You are perfect, I wish you were mine!.
But keeping you a secret is totally fine!.
There it is!. Does it sound good!? :D Tell me plz! Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
omg, that poem is so sweet!
you should really keep writing poetry, because it is a great outlet, and you can vent your feelings (whether they are good or bad ones)
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cute, change the first 'he' to 'you' tho!. kinda childiish but not because it rhymes; childish because you use words like glee, dumb, detention!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i chose this question getting ready to shoot down another pretender, but this is so cute! It really is!. i like it!. i hope things work out between you and your crush!. :) Good luck! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very nice I like it alot!. You did a nice job on rhymes and everything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
YES I LOVE IT AND IN FACT IT INSPIRED ME TO SEND A POEM TO THE GUY I LIKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!.!. i will send it to ya if u would like
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yes definitely make more!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's sounds great girl!!!
it's very creative!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Nice, I like it!.
Keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com
cute :)Www@QuestionHome@Com