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Question: What do you think!. (poem)!?
i get bored so i write poems!. what do you think!?
I walked outside in the bitter cold, with no gloves on my fingers, but your hand to hold!.
And you told me stories about how life could be!.
All the places we would go, and the things that we would see!.
We wished upon stars that night, as we sat far below!.
A minuscule star above had the brightest glow!.
I looked into your blue eyes, and saw an ocean rolling!.
California my love, in a year!. That’s where we will be going!.
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And then what!? You got started very well then left me hanging!. I think you should keep going and tell a story, make it a narrative poem!. You have the start of one, go on and try it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It would be better if you worded it differently!.!.
For eg!.
We walked outside, in the bitter cold!.!.
We have eachothers hands to hold!.!.
Tell me stories, how life could be!.!.
Places to go and things we'd see!.!.
We wished upon stars, as we sat far below!.
A minuscule star had the brightest of glows!.
I looked in your eyes, saw an ocean rolling!.!.
California my love, that's where we're going!.
The important part of poetry is syllables!.!.
For eg!.
*clap clap clap, clap clap clap clap*
*clap clap clap, clap clap clap clap*
*we wished up on stars as we sat far be low*
*a min u scule star had the brightest of glows*
Say each word with a pause in between them!.!.
Do you see what I mean!?
But your words are lovely and very imaginative!.
A poem is a great one if it makes you feel something!.!.!.
I felt something when I read this, especially the 'ocean rolling in his eyes' part!. Keep up the good work =)
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