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Question: I wrote this poem about my sister is it good or bad tell me what ya think!?
My Sister
She has six kids
That sometimes she forbids
and to get them back she don't intend
She thinks her husband is the latest trend
She dedicated her life to drugs
choose to marry that thug
in and out of jail she stays
a bad name she displays
She has lost her familys trust
Her mother she has cussed
in here eyes she cut the family ties
She lives in shame with a lot of pain
All she does is play mind games
and everyone else is to blame
Her family still has faith
But filled with alot for hate
their even tring to cope
But all she wants is the dope
Her family loves her so
but there is no way to know
If she will ever see The person she could be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Dealing with family who always don't know what's good for them is hard!. Your poem is good!. Keep on writing :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your is poem is good!.
but it could be better
There seems to be some emotion in there
but it is overlooked and shrouded with cliches
it doesn't need to rhyme
like her husband being the latest trend
change that one
otherwise
I enjoyed it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
good job!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i don't know!.!.!. its kinda weird i guess!. but it rhymes!. lolWww@QuestionHome@Com