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Oh, What for A Woman

Oh, what I could do for the touch of a woman,
Making everything soft within, then tired for the search is done,
No rest knows that with by your side woman,
When all things cliché’ give new light as your sun,

Days are longer, but now with meaning,
And not out of habit your destination is home,
For now every second spent, waiting, hoping, dreaming,
At last her and you are together alone,

Oh, what I would do for the chance of a woman,
All foretold floods the mind, nothing is further than the close,
No anticipation knows that of a woman,
Imaginary nectar carries great flavor in dose,

The day needs more time, goals must be met,
But these are just hopes in light of a vision,
By the end of the day, all chips have been bet,
The near future will be haunted by final decision,

Oh, What I must do for memory of a woman,
Strain to restore colors faded by time,
No obsession knows the mourn of a woman,
Through a course of events, no longer “mine”

The days seem faded; time slips though the hand,
As the mind takes it’s time to unblur the old,
Forget to walk because you hardly stand,
It is work for the weak, the strong, and the boldWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Not bad!. Not bad at all!.
Thought provoking, which is always good for a poem!.

Only thing is you change from "I" to "Her and you"

Don't really think that's how you want it to go!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A brave attempt, but needs some smoothing out!.Www@QuestionHome@Com