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Question: Jungle of modern days!?
This one is titled: Jungle

(Any criticism is good as long as you explain!.)



In the overgrown urban jungle I am

running from the delirious mad man

-With a crazy wild look in his eye

upon the streets, I stumble, I cry

betwixt the labyrinth of buildings I flee

evading the prowler, hoping I he can't see

sprinting onward toward inadequate light

desperately discerning for anyone in sight

no individual to be strolling along

an aghast feeling, harrowing and strong

spinning in rage I turn to face

whomever it is keeping pace

opening my eyes, I look to see

it's my shadow who's chasing meWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very good snow!. nice twist at the end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

haha!. that was funny!. i felt like i was running with you!. just as you think it's gonna lash out and eat you, you realise!.!. oh wiat, it was just my shaddow!.!.!. LOVED IT

It had a sort of!.!.!.!.!. exciting, powerful, feared way about it that really pulled me in!.

that was just awesome!. best poem i have read today!

well done!.

i do hope you write as your job as you sure do have a nack for it!.

xox jen xoxWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think the overall idea is very clever!. You just need to change either some of the adjectives to some of the words, like aghast really doesn't go well, or change some of the sentence structures!. I really think this is a cute poem!. Please keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com