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Question: My Angel came to me!.!.!.!.!.opinions please!?
Oh how I love my wealth and my land, and
This fine day decided to walk near my private
Creek!. Woe to anyone who should be sauntering
On my property!. My vicious canine will remedy
That problem with teeth latched upon skin, not to
Mention the pulling power associated with, to
Rip a fine gash on the leg of the poor victim!.

This Spring morning was brighter than others
For a reason not understood by me, as I am
Not very educated, but I know how to act as
Such to my few (very few) circle of friends!.
I arrived at the point I loved most, a large moss
Covered stone, that with the help of the sun
Shone the most brilliant green not even the
Greatest artist could bring to canvas!.

I always enjoyed standing on this mossy stone
Staring down at my small river with smaller rocks
Wondering how deep underground they went, and
Was reminded of an iceberg on the sea that shows
Merely one tenth it's true size as it floats at one
Knot toward a doomed vessel of old as the worthy
Sea Captain attempted a slow tack as to avoid death!.

A whimper from my loyal Shephard caught my ear
And my response was to leave me in my ignorant
Bliss when all of a sudden I was on my back upon
The moss covered stone in a backward arch!. Silly
Me!. I forgot that moss was slippery!. I felt no pain
As I couldn't move my legs!. The eyes of my servant
Dog said it all!. By the wagging tail, I knew I was alone!.

After a few seconds of staring and wagging he walked
To my creek for a drink, walked to me and lifted his leg!.
I was alone!. Not a religious man by my modest
Upbringing, money was God and that was that!. But
I couldn't help but think of that guy who God tested to
Knife his kid on a rock, soon saved by an angel at the
Last possible moment!. I waited for my angel!.

A day passed and the morning sun was as beautiful
As the previous day before fate put me in my current
Predicament!. I thought back to my days school
Recollecting about something about the 'heirarchy of
Needs'!. How did that go again!? Shelter first!?
My needs were those of aesthetic, and the needs to
Know and understand, which proved fruitless now!.

I was confident my leg-lifting dog would not return
And I took this act as an insult!. Shelter, water, food!.
The needs returned!. No school needed for that!.
Exposure!. The first cause of death!. I asked myself
If it was too late to pray!. I prayed for that angel to
Come and save me, in any form It chooses to take!.
And behold! there it was!. My angel!. I saw that it
Decided to take the appearance of a mountain lion!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WoW this is so great and i enjoyed it till the last word was read' and I think your a great story writer and a poet writer as it looks like you know how to get our attention' with your words of a great story!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a narrative not a poem, a very good one at that!.
You should pursue writing short stories, you are onto something here!.
Well done!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice, kept my attention, great ending!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I want to read more!. Do you have more to it!? So far so good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com