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Question: How does this poem sound!? its about the simplicity of the mind!?
im standing on the window panes
trying to grasp the moving planes
they move, they dive, they spin and twirl
they spread the dust across the world

the message was sent but none were recieved
they had no faith, they lost their creed
these simple minds, they intertwine
as the people were bought by the manipulated

the earth's flower that never blooms
holds the key for three thousand rooms
to gain the knowledge that i once seek
i fell into the endless peak

i took the spiral stairs to the stars
only to find that the universe is a sphere
within a sphere
inside an alternate universe Www@QuestionHome@Com


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wow that is good here is one of mine what do you think
Hidden love

Every day I see you,
I break down and want to cry!.
We used to be best buds,
But now you tossed me aside!.

You mean so much to me,
Though you will never know,
The feelings that I have for you,
The ones I'll never show!.

I fear that you'll laugh at me,
I fear that I will cry!.
I fear that you won't like me back,
And once I tell you I'll die!.

My heart will bleed like an open wound,
And my soul will fly high!.
My heart will become hidden inside,
For that I must continue to lie!.

You'll never see the feeling,
locked deep inside my heart!.
I guess I'll keep it in me,
Until I fall apart!.
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great poem! it really shows well the simplicity of the mind, as you said ?, and you should def keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's real good, you did a fine job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Amazing!.!.!.!.
although!.!.!.!.(i have to refine)

im standing on the window panes
trying to grasp the moving planes
they move, they dive, they spin and twirl
they spread the dust across the world

the message was sent but none WAS RECEIVED
they had no faith, they lost their creed
these simple minds, they intertwine
as the people were bought by the manipulated

the earth's flower that never blooms
holds the key for three thousand rooms
to gain the knowledge that i once seek
i fell into the endless peak

i took the spiral stairs to the stars
only to find that the universe is a sphere
within a sphere
inside an alternate universe

that is all!.!.!.good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com