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Question: Are these lyrics good!? !?
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i was a child
and you were a child
and we were shining in the day
before they came to take you away

hear me now
sunshine's spreading out through the night
see me now
fake lights spreading out to the sky
but did i ever take you away!?

and i don't want to end your slumber
you shouldn't care you shouldn't suffer
eventhough you asked me to stay

the leaves fell down in the garden
when you invited me to play
and i felt like you were taking me away
and i don't want to end your slumber
eventhough you asked me to stay
i saw the promising nights for today

hear me
the city blinds the lights from the sky
see me
now you see everything was a lie
but did i ever take you away!?

hear me
the city burns the lights from the sky
then you'll see that everything was a lie
but did i ever take you away!?

i don't want to end you slumber
you shouldn't care you shouldn't suffer
eventhought you want me to stay
i promise you i won't go away

when the lights were out
you're there to guide me
when i fall
you're there to hold me
im sorry that i couldn't see it all

the shading black clouds appeared to cover the sky
and i won't let them take me down for tonight
because i wanna take you away
and now the fiery lights begin to shine
and saw memories i couldn't find
i tried to dream our dreams
yesterday

i don't want to end your slumber
you shouldn't care you shouldn't suffer
and now im gonna care for you today Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I would love to hear the song recorded =) amazing lyrics keep going for it =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it, It is a slow song right!?
except (here comes the critic in me)
The chorus of a song ALWAYS sounds better IF it is consistent throughout a song
Other than that!.!.!.!.!.!. d(0!.0)b (two thumbs up BOY!!!!!)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes they are good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com