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Question: Need opinion on Poem please !?
It's called Words & thoughts, its about a girl that says one thing to herself but has a different thought in her head!.
Giving u my heart (which is now broken in two)
Is all i can think of (i can't stop dreaming about you)
Your voice is like a melody ( your words are my world)
Except when you talk such nonsense ( how much you love that other girl)
I know now that i don't need you ( i want you more every day)
I don't think about you at all (why can't the thoughts of you just fade away)
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This is like the best poem I have ever heard and it seems like it could be a song that would be played on the radio a bunch!. I love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com
omg! wow!. thats amazing!! it describes PERFECTLY, every line of that poem, what im going through right now! wow!. I LOVE IT!!! its perfect, ah-mazing, so true for soo many girls out there (including me)!. I like this guy sooo ******* much and he has a gf!. My heart is broken, and I have been trying not to like him, but its just to hard!Www@QuestionHome@Com
First change about to of, it sounds better to me!. And, some of your stanzas are longer than the others, so its mouthful to say them after the 4 or 5 worded ones!. Hope this helps!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
actually thats very good you use figurative language which is nice and it has a good heart and soul!. I get the feeling someone broke your heart Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's a good poem if it's supposed to be sadWww@QuestionHome@Com
I think that a very nice poem, but sorry to hear about that I hope you feel betterWww@QuestionHome@Com
WOW! This was good real good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Pretty good so far, you should conclude the ending better though!. Great Job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
sounds like your boyfriend just dumped you, sucks!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com