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Question: Help me please, can you appreciation this poetry!? !?
The Dance White Goose
Destiny fetchs us!.!.!.
Life spirit end with heaven
I walking …
I mind …
Beyond death there is alley too
But my ables smile
Then reassembles time
I say having this times
Tickle naughty on phalangeal
Illusion coalesce in my poems
Swoosh breath in my soul
Walk to eternity alley
Accompanies white goose dance
Waiting becomes to mean
Please Believe me, to longs too you!.!.!.
So , you light the power
With a fold prayer light
For the shake of white goose dance of us !
lifespirit 17 August 2008
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You can check your grammar!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You might want to think about taking up bowling or something, because until you learn grammar and punctuation writing poetry is out of the question!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh dear!.
What a pile of sh*t!.
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it would be ok ,if you didn't have at the end : "For the shake of white goose dance of us !"
you need to read more poetry !.
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I'm afraid it's just a pile of nonsense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i think its good!.!.!.really deep=DWww@QuestionHome@Com