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Question: Can someone check if my poem is in iambic pentameter!?
Darfur
In Darfur LIES a Hellhole DEEP and WIDE!.
Many Merciless oppressors REIGN unchallenged,
As Broken Blades STRIKE poor SOULS!.
Like Hungry Hyenas KILLING vulnerable PREYs,
The SMELL of BLOOD invades the AIR around!.
They Slaughter KILL, ransack, and RAPE villagers,
Remains only Countless DEAD in Nameless GRAVES!.
It SEEMS like DEATH himself to ROAM these LANDS!.
The Question Lingers, YOU believe in GOD!?
They LIVE to FIND refuge, no HOME, no PAST!.
They LIVE to FIND elsewhere, away, a HOME!.
Is Justice SIMPLY another incompetent WORD!?
When Hitler DIED, we SAID never again!.
A Dreadful SCENE, the Hopeful LEFT to PRAY!.
The Question LEFT, do YOU believe in GOD!?
In Darfur LIES a Hellhole DEEP and WIDE,
And MOST have DONE nothing at ALL to HELP,
TAKE STEPS for Darfur before it’s too LATE!.

the caps are suppose to be stressed i think, and the last line is intentional
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sorry, but no!. You get pretty close in the line "They LIVE to FIND refuge, no HOME, no PAST" but, for example, "Many Merciless oppressors REIGN unchallenged," has 12 beats as does
Is Justice SIMPLY another incompetent WORD" and you have only signaled one or two stresses (only one syllable of simply can be stressed, btw!.)!. You need to make sure every line has 10 beats for pentameter!. While you can play with stress a little bit (like you do with the last line) you need to be more consistent with hitting your stresses!.
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