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Question: Heart Ache!.!.!.!.Do you recognize this!?
I would like to know what you think!. Honestly!.!.!.!.!.(dont mind negative feedback)

His momentary words
Left a bitter taste
In my mouth
I walked away
In silence
The words ringing
In my mind!.
Falling through
A bottom-less pitt
Chunks of my life
The sum of my being
Where the tangible
Was bare
I outstretched my hand
And released intangible
Qualities, no gold
Could pay measure!.
His momentary words
Robbed me of the fond memories
I hoped to depart with
I wanted the both of us
To sew the past
Neatly with precious
Gold dipped thread
To remember
Who we were
And how we allowed
The other to gain strength
And grow wings
To set free the other
When growth pointed our ideas
Elsewhere
I embroidered so many dreams
With this man
From youth to yesterday!.
But today is a new day
I imagined he would
Kiss my hands
As I held him
In my something else
Of a love for him
Instead I wander
Off into new days
With the parting
Of his so-called
Momentary words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That's!.!.!.actually really good! I think this may have been the first good poem i've seen on the internet!

And mine!?
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I love it! Wow!.!.!.such marvelous imagery!. And I love how you communicated something so real and lifelike with such beautiful language!. GREAT job!


P!.S!.
my favorite part:
"I imagined he would
Kiss my hands
As I held him"
So sweet and sad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Woow!.!.!. Very long but the message is displayed so clearly!.

It's pretty good (much better than me) I really like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com