Is my onomatopoeia poem good?

Question: Is my onomatopoeia poem good!?

please read my poem and give it a score out of 10

Bang bang! Goes the guns, soilders on the run,
Running for their lives, thinking of their wives!.

Bang Bang tatter natter,
Listen to the machine gun clatter
Spliter splater another life shatter!.

Clitter clatter goes the swords,
While killing every horde!.

Cry Cry! goes the world,
For the people that went to the afterworld!.

They died in wars
Listen to the roars,
Of people applauding there corps!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I like it, it's good, I'd say 8 out of ten!. Although you spelt soldiers wrong, which is prob just the fact your typing it on a keyboard as i do that often too!
But yeah, well done, good imagery, keep it up :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not bad, certainly better than anything i could do=]

8/10

Just a few suggestions!.!.!.

You repeat the word clatter

And im not sure about the last stanza!.!.!.it just doesn't flow like the rest of the poem,

oh and grammatically; Soldiers and their* not thereWww@QuestionHome@Com

sure it is good! it rhymes!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com